SHARPEN YOUR PENCILS!
Using nothing more than your cunning, wit, and marvelous skills, rewrite this piece with your best work. If you want to, tell us why you think it’s weak and how your efforts make it stronger. Change tense, voice, style, or whatever you think makes it better!
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Here’s the beautiful part… These pieces are randomly selected from member submissions, but the replies (corrections) all go on this single page. Figuring out what passage your magnificent ‘correction’ is for, is more than half the fun 🙂
So without further adieu, your piece to correct!
Stephen found himself in what would become West Virginia early in the spring of 1747, having struck up a partnership of sorts with a conman by the name of Tilly. Tilly convinced Stephen that the local superstitions about a cave of green mist, that evil itself called home, was more likely a treasure trove safeguarded by legends. Stories of evil beasts and sudden madness were only intended to keep anyone from searching there.