SHARPEN YOUR PENCILS!
Using nothing more than your cunning, wit, and marvelous skills, rewrite this piece with your best work. If you want to, tell us why you think it’s weak and how your efforts make it stronger. Change tense, voice, style, or whatever you think makes it better!
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I try to remember how this whole thing came about. I certainly have no memory of going to sleep with a garden tool of questionable classification protruding from my head. The trouble is, I have no clear memory of what was happening before I woke up. There’s a hole in my memory, and I suspect it somehow corresponds to the hole I now have in my head. It’s probably a good thing the other side of the pick-head hadn’t been implanted, and it’s fortunate I’m no stranger to dealing with the effects of head trauma. I simply ignore it and start over. “So, Mikey. What are we doing here?”