The author has a distinct voice that stays consistent throughout. This helps the pace considerably as the story moves unerringly forward. Tension consistently builds and releases just before the reader has a stroke! Then starts again. This is a winning piece of work.
My Overall Rating is a 5/Excellent
Great action, strong character development, plenty of violence.
Premise Rank: 5/Excellent
A chinese syndicate moves to LA and troubles everyone.Structure Rank: 3/Average
1,2,3. Like clockwork.Character(s) Rank: 5/Excellent
All were properly defined.Conflict Rank: 5/Excellent
Great sense of pacing.Dialog Rank: 5/Excellent
totally real and believable.Pacing Rank: 4/Good
Moved good.Story Logic Rank: 4/Good
No major holes, though the whats it called is never identified.Originality Rank: 3/Average
Not really a new premise, but adds effectively.Writing Ability Rank: 5/Excellent
Writer is A list.Story Logic Rank: 5/Excellent
Yes. all good.